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Compression: How to Wrangle the Big Story –


originally a guest blog post on TRISH HOPKINSON's Selfish Poet


…do not paint too much after nature. Art is an abstraction; derive this abstraction from nature while dreaming before it, and think more of the creation which will result than of nature.” —Paul Gauguin

Existence is infinite and ineffable, but poetry creates a cup to hold it. The cup shapes the story; the story shapes the cup. In the shaping, the writer and the reader are often surprised.


The process of telling the infinite story, telling the truth, is as sacred as a baby—even more so since so many of us have been silenced—but it’s the job of the poet to raise that baby, to craft it. To employ another metaphor, the story is a huge fish, which, after being snagged, is then crafted into a manageable piece of sushi.


There are many methods to contain the infinite story, but the first convention that comes to mind is form. Writing a sonnet, ghazal, pantoum, or villanelle, etc. is one way to wrangle the enormous tale and also to ignite the discovery and music that imbues the poem with feeling. Some writers—Jericho Brown’s duplexes come to mind—tailor their own forms, turning the tables and crafting the form to the content, then adhering to their own form.


The best way to learn how to write form poems is to read form poems—old ones and new ones. I like to study the way writers adhere to form and break it. In general, I like the poem to control the form, not vice versa. In other words, I enjoy reading a poem and asking, Wait a minute, is that a sonnet? To see repetition and ask, Wait, is that a pantoum? Spying the form is delightful, tapping into the long history of poetry. Sometimes, I set out to write a form poem, and the form is barely apparent at the end, but the repetition, rhyme, or length haunt the poem, lending it gravitas.


Let’s look at a sestina I wrote and analyze its genesis:



Sister Sestina


Hard to believe,

once, all I wanted

was to be pretty,

to be loved.

My older sister's body

was made of men,


desire-drunk men

gilded with belief

in the pull-tide of her body.

I saw it so often, I wanted

it too. I was not loved,

only beaten, but I wanted to be pretty.


I knew I’d never be pretty,

never unravel men,

pull their love 

from their throats, make them believe

what they wanted

was the ruby-heat of my body.


I was told a woman’s body

was a sting, to be pretty,

a scorpion, to be wanted

by the ember-eyes of men— 

a witch-made safety. I believed 

what I was told about love,


but it bought me no love,

no light in the hollows of my body.

Back then, my sister believed

our mother’s incantations—be pretty,

let your scent ensorcell men.

To be wanted


was all she wanted

Maybe because we were beaten, love

became the breath of men.

When our  beaten bodies

lit them with panic, we felt pretty,

believed.


We didn’t want to be sisters, only bodies,

safe from the whip, loved, pretty.

Men would split us like fruit. Believe us.


–Dion O’Reilly, first published Marin Center Anthology


I started with over a page of words and phrases, pasted on my first draft, from a 400-page word bank I have compiled from my reading, my passing thoughts, and what I see and hear in the world. Of course, because the thorny issue of abuse, beauty, and power vexes me, it appears frequently in my word bank. My early indoctrination around attracting the male gaze must have been on my mind that day because I added references to it—from my word bank— to my first draft.


At some point, I pasted this thought on my document:

hard to believe: once, all I wanted was to be pretty. To be loved.


I can look at my Google doc history and see that, over a period of about ten minutes, I cobbled together the following stanza from my word list, which, as you can see, I later changed:


hard to believe,

once, all I wanted was to be pretty.

To be loved.

My sister’s body seemed to be made of the faces of men


I saw six potential line-ending words, so I went to an online sestina generator and filled in believe, pretty, loved, body, men.


Here is what the generator gave me—the line endings in sestina order. I won’t include all the stanzas here :


# Stanza 2

... men

... believe

... body

... wanted

... loved

... pretty


# Stanza 3

... pretty

... men

... loved

... believe

... wanted

... body

….

# Envoi (includes two keywords per line!)

... wanted ... body

... loved ... pretty

... men ... believe



Then i started fleshing out the lines to form a sestina. Here are parts of an early draft, taken from my Google doc revision history:


it too, . I had not yet bled, was not to be lloved,

only beaten. I wanted to be pretty.,


I knew but I’d knew I’d never be pretty

that I cwould never learn to lure men

tomake them love

me like a goddess. ..

When you hear it enough, you need to be pretty

to move like a cats. To be Wwanted,

followed followed by the blank eyes of men.

seen and believed...


Some ideas in this draft, like the references to menstruation and control, albeit powerful, were not vivid enough and did not work in support of the discovery, while images like the following were added later:


desire-drunk men

pull-tide of her body

unravel men,

pull their love from their throats, 

ruby-heat of my body

a woman’s body was a sting, to be pretty, a scorpion, to be wanted by the ember-eyes of men— a witch-made safety.

no light in the hollows of my body.

our mother’s incantations

let your scent ensorcell men


The added images above are vivid, but more importantly, they build a description of a perverse— almost superstitious—idea about female power that pervaded my childhood. Some of the added diction came intuitively, some from searching my word bank, and some came to me as I continued to read other writers, think, and study.


This poem went through many drafts, but the basic order of operations was the following:

  1.  I intuitively pulled from my extensive word bank, creating about a page of possible words and phrases, much of which landed on the editing room floor.

  2.  I spied a possible form—a sestina.

  3.  I established the line endings with a generator (of course, a generator is optional, but I find them fun and helpful)

  4.  I fleshed out the lines, working toward a narrative idea.

  5.  I developed my imagery to be more vivid AND in support of a larger concept— the complex attitude toward female beauty and its relation to power and subjugation.


Some poems want to live in form. The challenge is to be sensitive to the poem’s needs. Then, in the process of sharpening the imagery, a strong discovery may emerge, and the overwhelming personal experience is contained in an ancient vessel, or, as we love to put it, a craft.



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